briancloughisthebest

Here is the match against Aldershot
Forest V Aldershot
and here's the player ratings
player ratings

Peacemaker7

Is there a reason why this is still open?

I've farted better 'stories'. All I see here is a bunch of one line crap, and some screenshots. This has never been accepted before on this forum as being a proper story and I don't see why it should be now. I've held my tongue long enough, I don't care what the standards of the forum have fallen to, this simply isn't acceptable by any of them.

Terk

I have to agree with Peacemaker. I haven't been keeping an eye on this, I must admit, but it certainly isn't anywhere near what we consider a story.

I'm inclined to give you one final chance to turn this around. Go and read some of the other efforts on the board, see what we expect. Screenshots cannot tell your story for you, and posts of a single sentence are simply not acceptable.

If it doesn't improve soon then I'll be forced to close it.

briancloughisthebest

Overview
It was simply easy to day as we teached Aldershot a lesson about football.The girst goal came on 34 mins when Dadi made a forward pass to Johnson who had the goal at his mercy.The second goal came on 55 mins when Ross Gardner made a nice pass to Johnson and easily went past the goalkeeper.
The next goal was on 62 mins when Mitea whipped in the corner to Zivkovic who headed it in.The final goal was on 83 mins when Pavel Mares took a free kick which landed at ross gardner who had a half volley at goal and scored a fantastic goal.Ross gardner was the man of the match as he created one goal and scored another

briancloughisthebest

ok close it then

Peacemaker7

I'm not trying to be nasty. If you have the basis of a story - and you clearly feel you have - surely you can take make time then to write one liners?

If you're not 100% sure, have a look around. It does NOT have to be perfect, its simply telling a story about your game. BUT, and this is the point, it does need to be more than,

We won.

We signed some bloke.

A picture.

Rather than posting everything as one liners, save it up, post it as a larger post. You can still use screenshots, but write something about them!

And remember, the OT thread is there, use it to ask for advice.

briancloughisthebest

I only did this because it was something to do and most of the time i enjoyed it. I didn't start this story to write an essay, and anyway no matter how much advice i get i'm not going to get to the standard of this forum so i think it is best if this was closed and i just have to read other storys.I thank the 2 comments of praise and peacemaker for his critiscm and trying to help.

Peacemaker7

You don't NEED to write an essay. Your style is quite simplistic, thats fine, use that.

You don't have to go into massive details, describing every minutae of the game - some people do, thats fine but clearly its not for you.

Why not just pick out the key games and give a brief description along the lines of:

Up to this game, we had gone seven matches undefeated so we expected to win. Our new signing, so and so who cost £x from some crap team, was on the bench. After x number of minutes we scored, with a fine short description of the goal. We ended up winning 14-0 and Jimmy got man of the match.

screenshot of match, jimmy whatever

Peacemaker7

But rather than post a thousand of those, combine two or three into one post, and hey presto you have a story.

cms186

if you havn't already, look at Amaroqs story for some pointers, its amazing.