Ibo, fcbarca, nod1ne, Lionel Messi

laytownking · 10-08-2006, 09:00 AM

All individual elements of this wall are brilliant but they don't really come together, they look like isolated elements.

Ok, first, Messi's looking left, so the natural tendency of someone seeing the graphic is to follow his eyes, but when you follow his eyes you see a washed out stadium - if you'll placed the text in his line of sight, it would give this wall much more flow.

Also, the perspective text kinda looks out of place.

The BG is spectacular, and the colours of the BG are the best part of the wall for me. The render effects are good, and very innovative, so is the text, but everything should be integrated better.

Sorry for being hypercritical, but this wall has SOO much potential in it.

aymen_h · 10-08-2006, 09:23 AM

I think the idea of the wallpaper is very good.
Most of the elements are accomplished well.
I believe that there are some things that can be improved though.
For example the figure in the bg should be moved to the left part of the composition, so that the main structure be clearer. And the clouds from the left to go to the right. We know that in every artwork the space is of paramount importance.
Next, the text. It's good, but it must be placed lower than the main figure. So, when you put the secondary one in the bg to the left, you'll have a complete line of the subjects, something like a zigzag.
The number '19' is the one thing i don't really fancy, because it is too big and does not fit with the border of the main text. And if I should be pedantic, we can't really see what is written with the tiny small red-blue letters, so, there's no point of them there. They must be enlarged /but not too much,ofcourse/.
Now, i like the lightning effects, undoubtedly the best part of this graphic for me. they follow the lines of the body, so..good one on that. Maybe the wall is too sharp for me, but that's not so important.
Also, the three lines behind Messi - in pinciple, this effect creates an impression for something old, ruined by time, and the whole conseption of the work does not premise that.
That's all from me, maybe a little bit boring, but i hope i've helped. Most of my critics are about some small things, but we know that God is in details. My main note is: the location of the subjects on the screen.
I'll be looking forward to a new collab between u guys.

.pontius · 10-08-2006, 10:23 AM

Great work right there guys. Lovin' the text and the render. colors are great aswell only flaw in my eyes are the circles and things around messi. credit bar is just -->

. fantastic work guys

CnixZ06 · 10-08-2006, 11:37 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ritwikr

All individual elements of this wall are brilliant but they don't really come together, they look like isolated elements.

Ok, first, Messi's looking left, so the natural tendency of someone seeing the graphic is to follow his eyes, but when you follow his eyes you see a washed out stadium - if you'll placed the text in his line of sight, it would give this wall much more flow.

Also, the perspective text kinda looks out of place.

The BG is spectacular, and the colours of the BG are the best part of the wall for me. The render effects are good, and very innovative, so is the text, but everything should be integrated better.

Sorry for being hypercritical, but this wall has SOO much potential in it.

Quote:

Originally Posted by `Lady`Ballack`

I think the idea of the wallpaper is very good.
Most of the elements are accomplished well.
I believe that there are some things that can be improved though.
For example the figure in the bg should be moved to the left part of the composition, so that the main structure be clearer. And the clouds from the left to go to the right. We know that in every artwork the space is of paramount importance.
Next, the text. It's good, but it must be placed lower than the main figure. So, when you put the secondary one in the bg to the left, you'll have a complete line of the subjects, something like a zigzag.
The number '19' is the one thing i don't really fancy, because it is too big and does not fit with the border of the main text. And if I should be pedantic, we can't really see what is written with the tiny small red-blue letters, so, there's no point of them there. They must be enlarged /but not too much,ofcourse/.
Now, i like the lightning effects, undoubtedly the best part of this graphic for me. they follow the lines of the body, so..good one on that. Maybe the wall is too sharp for me, but that's not so important.
Also, the three lines behind Messi - in pinciple, this effect creates an impression for something old, ruined by time, and the whole conseption of the work does not premise that.
That's all from me, maybe a little bit boring, but i hope i've helped. Most of my critics are about some small things, but we know that God is in details. My main note is: the location of the subjects on the screen.
I'll be looking forward to a new collab between u guys.

Thanks alot for the great critique and suggestions, I'm sure all 3 of us learned something there.

I did anyway.

Thanks everybody for the comments.